英検作文対策:Japan should impose green tax on the people.

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May 8, 2019 23:56 eiken 英検
I have been honing my essay writing skills to prepare for an English proficiency test that will be held in June. I would like to expand my vocabulary, especially on economics, politics and technology. Would you please correct my essay below? I would be grateful if you could show me more proper ways to express my opinion.

[Task] Write an essay on the given topic. Structure: Introduction, main body, and conclusion. Suggested length: 120-150 words.

[Topic] Japan should impose green tax on the people.

My answer: I think that Japan should impose green tax on the people for the following two reasons.
First, the introduction of green tax encourages eco-friendly activities of the people. In Japan, the environmental awareness has still room to improve. The people only care for their bills for electricity or gas. They consider the environmental issue only from a viewpoint of its cost, but not of the impact to the nature and the eco-system. The tax duty influences them to behave environmentally friendly.
Second, Japan should invest more in the environmental protection. Green tax can be allocated as the source of revenue for the environmental issue.
For these reasons, I think that Japan should impose green tax on the people.

I am not sure if you need "the" before "green tax", "environmental issue" and "environmental awareness" or not.