英検作文対策:Should more money be invested in space exploration and development?

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May 26, 2019 19:24 eiken 英検
I have been practicing writing English essay and reading more often newspapers online than before. I think that the range of my interest is so narrow that I only enjoy reading about what I am interested in but neglect to read about politics or technology.
Would you please correct my essay below? I would be grateful if you could show me more proper ways to express my opinions and new terms to learn.

[Task] Write an essay on the given topic. Structure: Introduction, main body, and conclusion. Suggested length: 120-150 words.

[Topic] Should more money be invested in space exploration and development?

My answer: I believe that more money should be invested in space exploration and development for the following two reasons.
First, studying about space has been a long term dream of humans. Everyone, old and young, is exited to learn new progress in space exploration and development. It has significance for human to give dreams.
Second, the discoveries in space contributes to studies in many fields. We can learn more about the earth by studying space, especially how the earth or space itself was born. Also, research for the resources out of the earth can bring us a solution to tackle the problems of a shortage of the terrestrial resources.
For these reasons, I believe that more money should be invested in space exploration and development.

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When I read this news, I was exited. It is a bit old news, but I can't forget how I felt with that at that time.
https://www.nasa.gov/image-feature/first-flower-grown-in-space-stations-veggie-facility
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